It really is a lovely planet.
It really is a lovely planet. It’s a shame that many of them don’t get to see it from out here. They can’t appreciate how insignificant they are. Indeed, in our dealings, most of them seem to think that they are of some great significance. It is ironic that my people have lost that perspective. We have forgotten what it is like to have a home. To have a sky and a sun and a moon. We have only had vast empty starfields for a long time, and nowhere for our people to rest. We have forgotten what it is like to matter.
So we move, looking for a potential home. This one could work. It feels right. It feels like home. It feels like a fresh start and a second chance.
It feels…
It feels…
It feels scary. If we fuck this one up then that’s it. No-more. We’ve been drifting for 150 years. We’re almost out of supplies. It’s smaller than the old one, with less water. But it’s still got beaches and forests, rivers and deserts and skies and clouds. It’s got oxygen.
We may have given up on god when the old world collapsed. We may have to bring him back to our hearts for this one. We may need him for our last chance.
oke. that was nice but should have been more bloody. like they are going to kill all ppl on earth to get a new home. or maybe they are the last ppl..i dunno. but it’s not really focused. you should work more on that to make the story good.
It’s not supposed to be focused. It’s a snapshot of sorts, a glimpse of a story. I rather like these. I can let my own imagination fill in the blanks.
I agree. this style of writing is all about letting your imagination fill in the blanks. it’s why i enjoy it anyway. keep it up!
Agree with Rickus and chicka – you’ve said enough. Just hope God gets a word in with your readers (and the rest of us on the planet using the resources)
good work – short and too the point – makes you wonder what’s in store for the current inhabitants. – m.j.
I only wonder who the narrator is, and when he is narrating from. Is this someone watching us, or one of us watching them.